This week I have been learing about descriptive writing in which Room 12 have to write about the firework. Below is my completed task I hope you guys would like to view and read. Thanks
Kia ora Hussain. This is a great descriptive piece of writing. I notice how you used an onomatopoeia to help describe the way the fireworks sounded. I also noticed that you used some great describing words, like "spectacular", and that you organised this writing in time order! Ka pai! I wonder if next time you could describe how you felt watching these fireworks.
Hello Hussain, My name is Yahya from room 23. Good job on the work, when I read the work it really feels like I'm their watching the real fire works. I really think the words describes the work amazingly. Nice work and see you later!
Kia ora Hussain. This is a great descriptive piece of writing. I notice how you used an onomatopoeia to help describe the way the fireworks sounded. I also noticed that you used some great describing words, like "spectacular", and that you organised this writing in time order! Ka pai! I wonder if next time you could describe how you felt watching these fireworks.
ReplyDeleteHi Hussain. This describes the fireworks really well. You put a image in my mind and I could see it clearly. I have nothing for you to work on.
ReplyDeleteHello Hussain, My name is Yahya from room 23. Good job on the work, when I read the work it really feels like I'm their watching the real fire works. I really think the words describes the work amazingly. Nice work and see you later!
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